Some advice from writerly types, please.
Mar. 25th, 2003 11:47 am![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
kitchen_kinkHi, all,
Many of you have seen this little tale in one form or another already. (If you haven't, and you're bored, take a look.)
It was summarily rejected by The Atlantic not long ago, and I'm ready to send it out again, while Foreigners is stuck at The New Yorker.
My writerly friends, with a little knowledge of this tale's content and tone, where would you recommend I submit it next?
Your input is much appreciated.
Many of you have seen this little tale in one form or another already. (If you haven't, and you're bored, take a look.)
It was summarily rejected by The Atlantic not long ago, and I'm ready to send it out again, while Foreigners is stuck at The New Yorker.
My writerly friends, with a little knowledge of this tale's content and tone, where would you recommend I submit it next?
Your input is much appreciated.
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Date: 2003-03-25 08:55 pm (UTC)The first real problem is easily remedied: ditch the second-person approach. It's too Eighties, it's very distracting, and it's nigh-dictatorial. Also, my name isn't Lillian. Make it first-person, otherwise the reader spends too much time outside of the story.
I like the rabbit story. It gives us a good sense that Siegel is incapable of being in an event, only in being in favor of himself.
There is a good progession of character development, especially within the narrator.
Of course, now I'm left to wonder how cleanly the narrator leaves the situation. What happens next?
Quick thoughts. I liked it. It makes me want to tour my cerebrum again.
-not sure I said much, Dante